Very pretty. Nicely emotional. And you're wise to seek help from a producer. It's always good to have a new pair of experienced ears that can hear and imagine things you cannot because you're just too close to the material. Let's put it out there and see what comes back. I'll share it with about 100,000 people on my social media networks.
This is a great song with so much emotion and musicality! You are instantly pulled in by the piano in the beginning, wondering where it will lead you. When the vocals arrive, you are whisked away into an abyss. I believe the intro was just a bit long before the vocals come in, but I'm also aware of what uses this song could be part of. Seems great for a movie scene in many genres....good work!
I love it. Very soothing. It may not be for everyone but it served me. Deep lyrics. There is an audience for this. This would have worked perfectly during the latter 60's hippie movement as well. Don't change a thing. People who listen to Spoken word would love this.